Friday, July 5, 2013

CD: Basho's famous 'The Old Pond"

Carpe Diem's Tan Renga Challenge #5



Matsuo Basho's famous haiku:

the old pond
a frog jumps in -
the sound of water 

I am to add two lines of seven syllables each to this haiku.
Here is my attempt:

a breeze carries water sprayed
nearby lily pad is cooled

 

14 comments:

  1. Excellent added lines to Basho's classic ~ can feel the 'spray of water' ~ Happy Weekend and thanks for 'visiting ~ ^_^

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  2. Lovely Grace, you can feel that cooling spray :)

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  3. Thank you, all! So intimidating adding to a master's haiku. Interesting how we all managed to go in a different direction or from a different angle on the splash.

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  4. Wow ... you excelled in this challenge :-)

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    1. Thank you, Amrit! Just pictured what happens when a frog jumps in a pond. :)

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  5. A delicate water spray to cool the lili ... nice completion Maggie.

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  6. Ooh...better than the original!

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    1. Huge compliment, Tim...I wouldn't go that far though. You make me blush. Thank you.

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  7. I love that little splashing frog of yours

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  8. Nice try...I like it...very creative
    Peace
    Siggi

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