Carpe Diem Special #48
We are to write a haiku in the same sense as the one penned by Jane Reichhold:
riversong
wind blown from autumn trees
a stream of gold
wind blown from autumn trees
a stream of gold
My inspired haiku:
wisteria vines
last green clinging to autumn
last green clinging to autumn
driftwood by springtime
The do look like driftwood clinging to the wall no you mention it :)
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Sweet. 'Last green clinging to autumn'- superb!
ReplyDeleteI'm very impressed by the way you took Jane Reichhold's haiku and totally transformed it to make it your own.
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Very pretty. I am wondering if you need that last line at all since the 2nd line is so strong.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Lolly. I'm not familiar yet with shorter versions of haiku as you are. Just moved away from interchangeable first and last lines. I would like to do one lines but have to read up on it first. I did struggle with the last line so maybe that should be my guide. Maybe Kristjaan will introduce some shorter forms down the road. I learn the most here and greatly respect your advice. You have so much more skill and comfort with haiku.
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clinging to autumn ??
Wow! I love your original take on the prompt! Well done! And I enjoyed the last green clinging to autumn - reminds me of how we savor those last days before winter sets in!
ReplyDeleteOh, Maggie, I like how you interweave the seasons and the images here -- a very beautiful haiku!
ReplyDeleteVery well done Maggie. It's not a regular way of writing haiku in which several seasons are mentioned, but in this one it's very well done. Thank you for your daily effort to write and share haiku with Carpe diem.
ReplyDeleteAwesome...very well done...I love the wisteria reference.
ReplyDeletePeace
Siggi