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ah..lovely!
Nice, and tells a story.
Oh this is poignant. I can see and feel this moment you have described.
This is lovely -- so much in so few words.
This rings with sadness...Sweeping the Porch
This gives me so many different images, some sad, some sentimental and some needing a good clean :)warm summer raindrops
is that a tear I see, or is it just the dust?
I see him dusting a picture frame ....
Tiger, I see from your comment how the pronouns also make the mental image ambiguous. Thank you for sharing your vision!
very touchingnicely donei like the ambiguityCheers!JzB
Love the many layers in this.
Lovely, Maggie. I see him tracing names or figures in the actual dust on the dresser. A sense of loss. Very nice.
This brings many memories to mind...
After you've been together so long, the memories tend to blur, I'm sure.Sweeping the Sky
Awesome haiku Maggie, I like the way how you've used Jane's haiku to write this very personal(?) haiku.
Thank you, Kristjaan. I used poetic license but hubby did just get a new dresser which I love and put framed photos on top. No dust tho ;-O
ah..lovely!
ReplyDeleteNice, and tells a story.
ReplyDeleteOh this is poignant. I can see and feel this moment you have described.
ReplyDeleteThis is lovely -- so much in so few words.
ReplyDeleteThis rings with sadness...
ReplyDeleteSweeping the Porch
This gives me so many different images, some sad, some sentimental and some needing a good clean :)
ReplyDeletewarm summer raindrops
is that a tear I see, or is it just the dust?
ReplyDeleteI see him dusting a picture frame ....
ReplyDeleteTiger, I see from your comment how the pronouns also make the mental image ambiguous. Thank you for sharing your vision!
Deletevery touching
ReplyDeletenicely done
i like the ambiguity
Cheers!
JzB
Love the many layers in this.
ReplyDeleteLovely, Maggie. I see him tracing names or figures in the actual dust on the dresser. A sense of loss. Very nice.
ReplyDeleteThis brings many memories to mind...
ReplyDeleteAfter you've been together so long, the memories tend to blur, I'm sure.
ReplyDeleteSweeping the Sky
Awesome haiku Maggie, I like the way how you've used Jane's haiku to write this very personal(?) haiku.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Kristjaan. I used poetic license but hubby did just get a new dresser which I love and put framed photos on top. No dust tho ;-O
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