Carpe Diem #255 ~ Intuition
inner wisdom
intuition with a name
correcting my path
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the way
she reaches for her phone
before it rings
I don't know if this second one qualifies for a one line haiku or not. It just didn't seem to need more than this thought to portray intuition. Feedback please.
I like both your haiku Maggie. That second haiku can be read as a One-Line haiku: "the way she reaches for her phone before it rings" it sounds smooth and is very clear in it's image I would say. Thank you Maggie for sharing these with us. It;s a joy to read your haiku an to see that you're growing in this wonderful haiku poetry.
ReplyDeleteThe second one is perfect just the way it is. Since it falls into the "human nature" category (meaning it's a senryu), no seasonal/nature word is needed. Great job with a difficult prompt!
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they both work well for me, Maggie, nice!
ReplyDeleteWow you really nailed intuition, especially in the second one! It reads well in one or three lines to my ear. Bravo! Keep writing!
ReplyDeleteyes, both of these ring true
ReplyDeleteI like the three-line version as well. The line breaks allow the poem to build so the last line finishes the thought.
ReplyDeleteExcellent Grace, you certainly made the right call on that second one ;)
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*giggling*. Reading as I'm waking up with SAD light, hubby bringing me espresso, and listening to fav music. Thank you!
DeleteVery good takes on the prompt.
ReplyDeleteThe phone one...do that often.
Peace
Siggi