Tuesday, June 11, 2013

HH: Modern Version

Haiku Heights #255 ~ Chivalry



after summer rain
a puddle in the footpath
they leap together


19 comments:

  1. Beautiful imagery...and so well composed!

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    1. Thank you! Took me awhile to get the last line to where I liked it.

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  3. leaping hand in hand
    across the footpath puddle
    next puddle beckons

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  4. I like the narrative quality of you haiku. It make me wonder what happens next.

    landing she stumbles
    he catches and steadies her
    next they run and splash

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    1. Makes me want to put on my bright yellow galoshes!

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    2. I had to come back for a second visit to your blog. What fun!

      yellow rubber boots
      too many joyful splashes
      he helps pour hers out

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    3. Yes, this turned into a fun puddle jumping haiku prompt commentary!

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  5. Love it...thank you..☺
    Peace
    Siggi

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  6. delightful Haiku Maggie :) puddle jumping is fun but doing it together is absolute joy :)

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  7. Beautiful haiku.


    mud puddle
    he keeps his promise
    to catch her

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    1. I like your version. More romantic :)

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  8. A leap and stumble
    From one puddle to the next
    Goals in sight are met

    Gallant strides together!!

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  9. They leap together
    and land in the puddle;
    splash of love and joy..

    http://rameshsood.blogspot.in/2013/06/horse-gives-lesson.html

    RS:)

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  10. Thank you all for this lovely and fun puddle jumping haiku sharing!

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  11. I like this ~ chivalry not needed when you work together ~ equally caring! Great x

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