Carpe Diem's Tan Renga Challenge
We are learning a new form of writing called Tan Renga which follows the format of 5-7-5 written by one poet and two lines of 7-7 written by another poet. The first three lines of this Tan Renga was penned by renowned haikuist Jane Reichhold. The last two lines are my challenge:
scattered in sand
embers of a saltwood fire
face to face with stars
crescent moon reflects on shore
only their footprints remain
I am glad that you have picked up this challenge Maggie. Tan Renga is awesome to do so I hope that it will have a long lasting life on Carpe Diem.
ReplyDeleteYour second stanza is really nice. With that stanza you have completed a love story which was started with the first stanza by Jane Reichhold. Thank you for sharing your effort for this first Tan Renga Challenge with us.
Namaste
It's a little intimidating adding to a haiku master's haiku. I felt that her part left an emptiness which I tried to describe. Great challenge!
Deletethat is a lovely image
ReplyDeleteand a bit enigmatic
very nice indeed
Cheers!
JzB
fabulous...this is a joyous exercise, isn't it?
ReplyDeleteMaddening and wonderful at same time ;-)
DeleteAh..I always love a happy ending !
ReplyDeleteLove the ending, mine went similar way... but a little question mark at the end
ReplyDeleteDelightful image -- with moon and footprints!
ReplyDeleteOh I do like this. I love to walk barefoot on the sand :)
ReplyDeletescattered in sand
I do too! Been decades since I walked along the beach. The late 80s I think.
DeleteThank you all for comments. I was gone all day. Glad you liked it. Can't wait to read all of yours!
ReplyDeleteThis adds nicely.
ReplyDeleteA nice last two lines...thank you.
ReplyDeletePeace
Siggi