Saturday, June 8, 2013

CD: Scattered In Sand

Carpe Diem's Tan Renga Challenge



We are learning a new form of writing called Tan Renga which follows the format of 5-7-5 written by one poet and two lines of 7-7 written by another poet. The first three lines of this Tan Renga was penned by renowned haikuist Jane Reichhold. The last two lines are my challenge:


scattered in sand
embers of a saltwood fire
face to face with stars
crescent moon reflects on shore
only their footprints remain



13 comments:

  1. I am glad that you have picked up this challenge Maggie. Tan Renga is awesome to do so I hope that it will have a long lasting life on Carpe Diem.
    Your second stanza is really nice. With that stanza you have completed a love story which was started with the first stanza by Jane Reichhold. Thank you for sharing your effort for this first Tan Renga Challenge with us.

    Namaste

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    1. It's a little intimidating adding to a haiku master's haiku. I felt that her part left an emptiness which I tried to describe. Great challenge!

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  2. that is a lovely image
    and a bit enigmatic
    very nice indeed

    Cheers!
    JzB

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  3. fabulous...this is a joyous exercise, isn't it?

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    1. Maddening and wonderful at same time ;-)

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  4. Ah..I always love a happy ending !

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  5. Love the ending, mine went similar way... but a little question mark at the end

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  6. Delightful image -- with moon and footprints!

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  7. Oh I do like this. I love to walk barefoot on the sand :)

    scattered in sand

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    1. I do too! Been decades since I walked along the beach. The late 80s I think.

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  8. Thank you all for comments. I was gone all day. Glad you liked it. Can't wait to read all of yours!

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  9. A nice last two lines...thank you.
    Peace
    Siggi

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