So beautiful...yet it is haunting. I had a mockingbird last year that sang all through the night. I started researching the reason and learned it perhaps hadn't found a mate yet or had lost one and was grieving.
A lot my writing comes from subconscious. I wasn't necessarily connecting the two haikus consciously but it seems that's what I did. And I too see the double meanings now. The last line of first haiku is open for interpretation but meant it as human grief triggered or amplified by the bird's song. Thank you for reading and questioning!
Maggie, this melancholy poem rings true. Made my heart sad too as I mourned with the nightingale. I have just read through the comments...hmmm, seems you had not intended the to haiku to be connected....but for the reader (me) they are and so beautifully. One leads right to the other. Beautiful work.
So beautiful...yet it is haunting. I had a mockingbird last year that sang all through the night. I started researching the reason and learned it perhaps hadn't found a mate yet or had lost one and was grieving.
ReplyDeleteIsn't it amazing how animals/creatures grieve for each other? Thank you for your lovely comment, Susie!
Deleteaw, she must be missing him! sweet haikus
ReplyDeleteI really like that first stanza...it's so grievously beautiful and I love the sound play in "sadness magnified" excellent, Maggie!
ReplyDeleteThis is haunting. I love the wondering about the bird's grieving. Lovely.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, ladies. Am feeling a bit of grief so it found its way into the haiku.
ReplyDeleteGrieving hits harder at night sometimes... I wonder if the "voice" is the one the bird is searching for or the one you think you hear ... ?
ReplyDeleteA lot my writing comes from subconscious. I wasn't necessarily connecting the two haikus consciously but it seems that's what I did. And I too see the double meanings now. The last line of first haiku is open for interpretation but meant it as human grief triggered or amplified by the bird's song. Thank you for reading and questioning!
DeleteA wonderful gift, if your subconscious leads you to write such beautiful haiku. I hope it helps you in your grief.
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I loved the way you have captured pain here. In sweetness of a melody lies an angst untold!
ReplyDeleteMaggie, this melancholy poem rings true. Made my heart sad too as I mourned with the nightingale. I have just read through the comments...hmmm, seems you had not intended the to haiku to be connected....but for the reader (me) they are and so beautifully. One leads right to the other. Beautiful work.
ReplyDeleteI feel your sadness and grief ~ Lovely words to read ~
ReplyDeleteSweetly gentle.
ReplyDeleteYou have a wonderful knack of creating a tiny experience within the lines of the haiku. The second is particularly atmospheric.
ReplyDeleteYou have let us glimpse into a fleeting world - thank you ~ M
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