Wednesday, August 21, 2013

CD: Kikaku's "A Flock of Swallows"

Carpe Diem Special #53 ~ A Flock



Our challenge is to  write a haiku in the same tone, sense and Spirit as Kikaku's:

above the sea
a rainbow, erased by
a flock of swallows 





My inspired haiku:





above the forest
thickening smoke reminds us
what lived below



12 comments:

  1. What a sad idea ... I see a bush fire in front of my eyes ... such a sad thing to see how Mother Nature sometimes catch fire.

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  2. Oh yes, I'm familiar with such bush fires. It is amazing what new life they create in their aftermath however.

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  3. Your haiku is too reminiscent of the recent Yarnell Hill Fire in Arizona, and makes for some mournful reading. Despite the sorrow, however, well done.

    Flights and Gulps of Swallows

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    1. So sorry. That's exactly what came to my mind when I wrote this.

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  4. My mind went right to hell, literally...that's what I saw causing the smoke!

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  5. Oh, forest fire is a grievous loss. Great visual!! Beautifully honed.:)

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  6. i can only agree with everyone else

    peace
    JzB

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  7. WoW...excellent response ! Impressive.
    Thank you.
    Peace
    Siggi

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  8. Very poignant... lovely and sad response... just read dVerse and Victoria's pics from Reno...

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