Trifecta: Week Seventy-Three: Mind Shadows
Write a story between 33 and 333 words using the word "color" with the definition: complexion tint: a : the tint characteristic of good health; b : blush.
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Returning to her therapist Georgia felt like sentencing herself to an insane asylum. How could she possibly share such grisly details whether true or not? A man with no face in a graveyard late at night standing next to an open grave wearing a hooded robe and chanting, joined by several others. It gave her chills to hear the chanting in her mind. Fast forward to feeling like a little girl peeking into the grave. The man is holding a gun to her head telling her to jump in or be killed. She can feel the gaze of the other hooded shadowy figures. A pile of corpses, grotesque and moving with reptiles and insects, lay at the bottom. The first time she peeked down, she woke up screaming, color drained from her face, hearing the cock of a gun.
The nightmare skips to behind the shower curtain where, in the bottom of a claw foot bathtub is a scene similar to the grave. Again she has a gun to her head with orders to enter. The cock of the gun awakens her screaming, sweating, and gasping. It’s not true though. It’s just a nightmare. Besides, how could people do such things without being caught? Where did the bodies come from? Why was she witnessing such macabre scenes?
In the movie MacKenzie is watching on television, someone cocks a gun. She screams so loud she can’t believe it came from her throat.
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Oh dear...her world is losing focus....
ReplyDeleteThanks for coming back for the continuation. Yes, her world is. Glad it comes across.
DeleteThe way you developed the sound that triggers her reactions - the cocking of the gun - was really interesting. The man without a face is definitely concerning...cool continuation!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Brian!
DeleteThis is so terrifying! And so well written!
ReplyDeleteOoh "terrifying". Thank you for your lovely comment on my writing. Funny how your saying it was terrifying made me smile ;-O
DeleteExceptional Maggie. Redolent of a controlled release of horror from within. A very positive usage of malevolence that actually converts it's very nature, from a destructive; to a constructive force.
ReplyDeleteYou wrote her terror well. It must be confusing to have such a nightmare over and over and not know what it means. I'd be reluctant to tell others, too...they'd think it was crazy.
ReplyDeleteI was a trauma therapist and most who have repressed or dissociated memories do feel crazy when they begin to surface. Thank you for reading and commenting.
DeleteLOVE the continuation, and the picture you used. I think the claw of the tub made it so much more terrifying.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much! I scrolled through tons of photos of claw foot tubs but that one with just the foot did look creepiest to me too!
Deletewell narrated.
ReplyDeleteThat is a creepy-ass dream. I don't blame her for getting freaked out. I certainly hope it's not based on real events that are happening!
ReplyDeleteIt's actually a culmination of how trauma can manifest that has been hidden in amnesia or repressed in memory. Definitely creepy when it happens. Thanks for reading and commenting, Draug! Creepier than vampires? lol That's soooo scary to me...graphic I guess is correct term. But go, you, cuz I know there are tons of vampire fans. I'm into the Twilight touchie feely emotional vampires ;-O
DeleteYikes, poor thing, those are some horrific images. That's a lot to work through. Is she up to the task? I'll tune in to find out if you continue it.
ReplyDeleteslipping away .. well written
ReplyDeleteThere's definitely a sense of something worse underneath, behind, in back, out of sight, trying to be noticed.
ReplyDeleteQuite a haunting!
This is disturbingly creepy It's like all of those spooky psychological horror movies. Nice continuation from the previous part.
ReplyDeleteThanks for linking up!
Thanks to all who visited and read my entry and took time to comment. Went out of my comfort zone for this one. Don't know how to continue without going into psychology of it. Perhaps a challenge to ponder for the future.
ReplyDeleteGreat to see the continuation of the previous piece, and I love the way the tension builds and builds.
ReplyDeleteGreat ending with the television triggering her scream. It shows just how close to the edge she is.
ReplyDeleteGreat job!
Thank you Thomas and Renee for your kind comments and for taking the time to read my story! Greatly appreciated.
ReplyDeletePart two, creepy, creepy, creepier. I can't wait to see why she has all these visions. Congratulations on your win last week with part 1.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Ann. Am going to attempt a next segment. I feel challenged by all the comments.
DeleteChillingly scary!No wonder she is getting edgier!I shudder to think what's going on behind that "curtain" in her subconscious mind-rather what went on?Looking forward to reading the next part:-)
ReplyDeleteSlipping sanity is always terrifying. You conveyed this aspect frighteningly well. Great job!
ReplyDeleteUnsettling, this. Very much so.
ReplyDeleteAtreyee, TMW, and biancanoire, thank you for your thoughts after reading the story. The emotions you are expressing are the emotions that an adult remembering childhood trauma feels. Unsettling indeed. Am trying to keep going but from MacKenzie's perspective as opposed to therapist perspective. My personal challenge.
ReplyDeleteWow, this is incredibly terrifying.
ReplyDeleteFictionalized reality. Reality can be terrifying as Boston showed us this week. Hoping to develop story in a way that really helps those not having grown up with trauma what it is like. Appreciate your feedback and your visit!
DeleteGood job narrating! I especially liked the way you described how scared she was. The cocking of the gun was spot on!
ReplyDeleteI've been following this tale since i found your site and it gets better and more intense each installment. Thank you so much for the disturbingness (was that a real word before today? I hope not)
ReplyDeleteA fan :)) Thank you! Hadn't intended on building this as a story but seems to be moving in that direction. Hope I don't disappoint.
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