Five Sentence Fiction – Angles
Flash fiction using only five sentences.
All segments of this story (Mind Shadows) can be found here.
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Nothing made sense to her, yet it was palpably real.
Returning to her therapist Georgia was her only sane option in spite of fear of being deemed a lunatic.
After trembling nonstop and tearfully describing the details of the horror she had witnessed, including the graveyard and chanting robed figures, MacKenzie was shocked to hear Georgia's response.
"Unfortunately you are not alone in having these kinds of memories and flashbacks," Georgia said quietly and assuredly offering support and compassion.
Ah, something tells me they're not just nightmares...
ReplyDeletehehe. If you are interested in the developing story, you can click on my blog links "Behind the Shower Curtain" (Part 2) and "Dream State" (Part 1). Am glad that this small submission stood alone as a part of it. Thank you!
DeleteWe write about what we know well and where are feelings still travel. You do it very well Maggie. Hook the reader right in!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Gail. You are so sweet to follow my writing. Above and beyond friendship ♥
DeleteDreams can take many forms, and in McKenzie's case it seems to be nightmares. Interesting she should make such a big deal about it, even though it's repeatedly what she dreams,
ReplyDeleteI'd watch your punctuation it will help in reading this,
Thank you for your feedback. MacKenzie is having flashbacks as well as nightmares as noted in the first sentence which is substantially different than just nightmares. Would appreciate specific comments on punctuation.
DeleteI like this a lot. The thing that really stuck out for me was the therapist 'offering her hand', as I know that this kid of physical touch rarely happens in therapy. It makes me wonder if Georgia is all she seems.....
ReplyDeleteAnyway, am following you now on GFC, as it's lovely to meet a fellow 5 Sentence Fiction writer xx
It's interesting that stood out for you. "Touch" in therapy is quite controversial. I have been in therapy and was a therapist until disabled. I have Georgia offering her hand if her client wishes to hold it so it's not crossing a boundary. But I appreciate that feedback. I want Georgia to be a trusted figure so may revise that. Your time and comments very much appreciated and thanks for the follow!
DeleteAs always, gripping words!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Grace!
DeleteIntriguing. Nice grab.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Cher!
DeleteEerie music queued.
ReplyDeleteSounds like a good one!
Scott
Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/04/19/five-sentence-fiction-angles-4182013-genre-sci-fi-humor-pg/
Dreams can be so real in many aspects. I often wonder about the interpretation of them. Thought provoking, at least for me.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your piece; it has a sinister feel to me; that they're more than just dreams and I would love to read more to find out why. xx
ReplyDeleteI felt MacKenzie's fear and trepidation and the comfort Georgia offers in the last sentence. You have packed so much into these five sentences!
ReplyDeleteThanks to all for reading and commenting. I appreciate hearing that the creepiness and discomfort come through. Hope I meet your expectations with my next opportunity to add a segment.
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