Trifecta: Week Seventy-Six
Use the following definition of blood and the word in a story of 33 to 333 words: a : lifeblood; broadly : life; b : human stock or lineage; especially : royal lineage; c : relationship by descent from a common ancestor : kinship; d : persons related through common descent : kindred; e (1) : honorable or high birth or descent (2) : descent from parents of recognized breed or pedigree.
This is an out-of-order segment of MacKenzie's story.
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| Polyvore by grace2244 |
Never in her art was there an image of a mother with her birth, but she sensed her mother’s egg was part of her being. So much art where she was wearing a crown. Royalty always a message. How could she be royalty unless…
MacKenzie frantically researched and found that artificial insemination was being done in the concentration camps and the United States had sheltered Nazis wanting their knowledge of space and other “experiments” following the war. One only needed to see Werner Von Braun’s rise to head of NASA for proof.
Her mind eerily wandered to The DaVinci Code and societies of royal blood. Even though the movie was fictional, any secretive society and rituals touched a very sensitive nerve with her. Perhaps the royals, wanting to ensure their bloodline, kept what would now be considered a sperm bank for the elite. Is it possible her mother’s egg was fertilized with royal sperm? That dark world her father had descended into and its covert government programs. Perhaps it had only been his job to ensure he kept her living in terror to maintain her amnesia.
It was only a theory but she was determined to know her origins. Royal blood would connect many of the puzzle pieces of her life. But why her?
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(MacKenzie's complete story to date can be found here.)
Good piece! There is a strong story with this character.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Joe!
DeleteFascinating story- and so many questions about her background. The idea of a secret society is both intriguing and frightening!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Janna. Was hoping it would be creepily intriguing.
DeleteI like to pretend I'm secretly royalty ^__^ lol Great piece!
ReplyDeletelol. You too can be a princess :)) Thank you, Draug!
DeleteGreat... thickening plot here.
ReplyDeleteYep, mixing fact with fiction. Evil US. hehe And, thank you!
DeleteOh Maggie! Wow! I am hooked...can't wait to find out what is really going on!
ReplyDeleteValerie, I think you are my #1 fan for this story. Thank you!
DeleteThis is really an intriguing piece.
ReplyDeleteThis is not a commentary on what you have written but a point of view item. You have written a really good piece. I'm an older American and my connotation of royalty is inbred and privilege. Anyone regardless of birth can achieve given the right circumstances.
Thank you, Ann. For the purpose of my story, though, the royal blood is an essential component. I agree with your last statement in real life!
DeleteI love fairytale, magical, king, queen stories. What you have written is great.
ReplyDeleteThis is such an interesting story. Thank you LM x
ReplyDeleteConspiracy theories, royal blood, and intrigue - got me hooked. Those royals will go to any lengths to maintain their line to the throne. Mysterious - well done!
ReplyDeleteYes, they will! Except the "conspiracy theory" you see is documented history. Most don't know that. As long as it makes the story exciting... Thank you, Steph!
DeleteThis was dark and intriguing. I really like this character!
ReplyDeleteI really like the digression into her art.
ReplyDeleteWow Maggie I've read all the way down from Prelude to here. What a great set of writing - you are busy and very talented.
ReplyDeleteSam, you are so kind. Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts!
DeleteI do like this a lot - just a little twisted and with hints of a greater story yet to be told.
ReplyDeleteIt is more twisted than usual but it's also further into the story. Will have to back up now. It's just where the prompt led me. Glad you like twisted :))
DeleteIt's intriguing and your premise is one that would be nice to explore I think.
ReplyDeleteHowever I would advise working on your launguage and expression a little because even where you are saying something good, the flow of the whole thing kept jarring at me a little which is a problem when reading short pieces like this.
Hope you don't mind the critique.
Cheers...
Am sorry you found reading this jarring. I don't mind the critique. I did reread it and am not finding your references. Maybe others will make similar comments. I do want to continue to improve this story. Thank you for being open about your impressions.
DeleteWow, so much packed into this short story! In the first two lines, I felt a lot of pain for this character. Nice work!
ReplyDeleteMaggie, you really know how to write a cliffhanger. I'm like K Dillman above; you had me at "she sensed her mother's egg was part of her being." An intriguing segment, leaves you hungry for more. Thanks, Maggie! Amy
ReplyDeleteThank you, KDJ and Amy for your comments and wanting more. Hoping I can continue to please.
ReplyDeleteThis is something many an adopted kid has considering. Interesting take.
ReplyDeleteI didn't know that! Very interesting. Must research that.
DeleteWhoa!Artificial insemination-concentration camps,NASA head & secret Royal societies-the makings of a real potboiler here Maggie!Can't wait to read the rest of the story-keep them coming:-)
ReplyDeleteThe prompt sort of made me jump ahead on this. Now will have to figure out how to back up. lol. Glad you like the elements!
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