Thursday, May 23, 2013

FSF: Le Cirque (2)

Five Sentence Fiction: Charmed


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Was it synchronicity or an ill-fated meeting on the street earlier that resulted in her reunion with her first and only love Nate? Why had she agreed to dinner knowing how uncomfortable she would be? Exiting the cab to the landmark restaurant she realized his career was on course and suddenly felt "less than".

Nate waited patiently at Le Cirque for Phoebe's arrival while reminiscing of their relationship and trying to analyze why it had failed. He felt charmed in her presence and eagerly longed to see her again.



15 comments:

  1. I guess I'm just an old cynic, but sometimes I wonder why people would want to try again at something that went to crap the first time. Ah well, it was nicely written and good luck to them!

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    1. Thank you for reading. You are thinking clearly but young people in love can't always think so wisely. Early story ;-O

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  2. Aw...I really liked this story - both the writing and the heart. Very nicely done, Maggie :))

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    1. Thank you, Jo-Anne! Maybe another prompt will add another piece. My mind can't decide where to go next.

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  3. There's nothing wrong with trying again, especially if: 1) Something has changed 2) Views are different 3) A long period of time has passed.
    I doubt they generally work out, but hope springs eternal.

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    1. almost forgot:
      Mine - Scott http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/05/24/five-sentence-fiction-fsf-charmed-rated-pg13/

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    2. Aw, a romantic. Thanks, Scott!

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  4. Ah, trying to fix something that is broken...maybe. Very sweet story..

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  5. Loved that you wrote both sides . . . I'm with Faycin in believing that exes are exes for a reason . . . but in the world of fiction, anything is possible :)

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    1. Thanks for reading and commenting. Yes, wanted to leave that open. Anything is possible :))

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  6. Interesting that he felt charmed by her presence while she felt lessened by his. Not a relationship destined to survive.

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  7. Ah, the human heart, and the "magic" of charm.

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  8. I hope this pair can start communicating and sort out the disparity in their relationship. Nice story.

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  9. Such interesting feedback, Sharry, Ann, and Sara. Communication is always the key. Maybe that's where I'll take it next.

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