Thursday, May 30, 2013

FSF: Crashing Down

Five Sentence Fiction: Desolate



Polyvore by grace2244

Happy in her amnesia, not knowing the reality of her life, was not a choice made willingly. When the walls of amnesia began to crumble, the overwhelming memories, flashbacks, nightmares, panic attacks, and knowledge of her fragmented mind threw her into such a desolate state. Death must certainly be a better place than the living hell that so swiftly changed her life sending her spiraling into an unfathomable depression.

From a happy marriage and successful career to constant panic and search for the truth along with a need for intense therapy and support. Who knew her 18 year marriage would disintegrate when she most needed his love and understanding.


11 comments:

  1. That seems to be the way marriages go--at the worst of my times. My cousin's wife dumped him just three weeks after his father died. Told him he was "no fun any more." They leave just when you need 'em most!

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    1. Have heard of this happening so many times. For better or worse doesn't seem to matter. Sometimes life takes us place we never thought we'd be. Thank you for reading and sharing.

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  2. That line between happiness and despair is a very narrow one. Without someone to love and support you, crossing over can be so easy.
    A great piece of writing.

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    1. Thank you, mj! Yes, I can go from one to the other in the blink of an eye. Fortunately I have developed good coping skills...usually ;-O

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  3. A great piece of writing, very emotive. xx

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  4. A lot of emotion wrapped up in it. Also, a lot that I can identify with.
    Small suggestion: I believe the last sentence is a question. No big deal.
    Scott
    Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/06/01/five-sentence-fiction-53113-desolate-apocalypse-rated-pg13/

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    1. I agonized over putting a question mark there. It felt right just using a period. Felt it gave a slightly different meaning but maybe am wrong. Thanks for reading and commenting!

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  5. A very powerful piece. Very well written.

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  6. Very heart wrenching and painful -- but then, desolation is terrible.

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  7. Like the image of amnesic walls crumbling. Your MC's pain is clear and well-told.

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