Friday, May 10, 2013

Trifextra: Danger Zone

Trifextra: Week Sixty-Seven


With 33 words, give an example of onomatopoeia.




Hearing the whirring of skateboards behind her and the overly loud cackling laughter of teenaged boys, she moved toward the edge of the road. The next sound was the gunning of an engine. 

Words: 33 

 

18 comments:

  1. Sounds like she's in trouble no matter which way she turns.

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  2. Ominous. I hope she'll be okay. Fyi, your link on Trifecta is leading back to our site. You might want to delete that link and link up again with the permalink to this post. Unless you love us so much you're trying to drive more traffic our way;)

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    1. Was thinking "brownie points". lol. I fixed it. Thank you for telling me!

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  3. Yikes! I no likey kid and cars...

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  4. Ooh...compelling!
    I agree with Sam. Kids and cars--also animals and cars--scare the bejeezus out of me.

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    1. Children running by from behind scares me too! Good to know it's not just me. Thanks for taking the time to comment!

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  5. Sam sold my word...YIKES! She's in a dangerous situation either way but I'd take the skateboards!

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  6. Maggie, This reminds me of every afternoon when the high school lets out-it can get pretty crazy! I hope she'll be ok too!

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    1. I didn't have enough words for a van to abduct her. Lol. Thanks for visiting, Valerie!

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  7. Where is Superman when you need him?

    So she gets to choose whether to be trampled by a band of teenaged skateboarders or mowed over by a car? Better odds ov avoiding collision with the car, I think! (My experience with kids - even elementary school- is that they won't alter their course.)

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  8. How terrifying for this young girl. A chilling tale.

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  9. I felt like a blind person, casually navigating my way while gathering my bearings through the neighborhood by surrounding sounds. Your words left it where intent would only be injected through what the reader was emoting.

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    1. Exactly, Jody. Amazing what gets filled in where nothing is said. Pretty cool. Thanks for your comments and for reading!

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  10. Scary... at least it hasn't happened yet.

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  11. Ooh!Wonder if she is going to run them over with her car-those bugging teenagers?;-)Great piece

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  12. Don't know how good I'd be anymore at diving into the underbrush - grew up in a town without sidewalks. Why can't they just leave the roads to the pedestrians?

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