Monday, September 30, 2013

CD: Eclipse

Carpe Diem #311 ~ Eclipse






light of my life
taking your last gasping breaths
eclipse of my heart


(I know the last line comes from a song, but I wanted to use it for this prompt.)


 

 

13 comments:

  1. Very nicely crafted haiku Maggie.

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  2. to watch the light of your light pass
    that would probably pull my moon out of gravity...

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    1. I know. I keep telling my husband he has to die after me. Really.

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  3. Wonderful to use that old song and turning it joyous beat to something so sad... very good.

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    1. Thanks, Bjorn...god of dark writing. Am glad it's not true. Have no idea why that's what came up though.

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  4. Watching one's beloved in the last moments of life is, indeed, earth shattering. Your poem is filled with a deep sadness.

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  5. Emotional writing... well-crafted haiku.

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  6. I'm all for borrowing bits and pieces of other works for haiku, as you know! Well done!

    Eclipse Their Beauty

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  7. Sad and lovely at the same time.

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  8. A total eclipse indeed :)

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  9. i like that sad touch......nicely done..

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  10. oh, Lord, I feel this one...

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  11. powerful and speaks so creatively of losing a loved one ~ well penned ~ carol ^_^

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