Monday, September 30, 2013

CD: Eclipse

Carpe Diem #311 ~ Eclipse






light of my life
taking your last gasping breaths
eclipse of my heart


(I know the last line comes from a song, but I wanted to use it for this prompt.)


 

 

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13 comments:

  1. Chèvrefeuille9/30/2013 4:38 PM

    Very nicely crafted haiku Maggie.

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  2. Brian Miller9/30/2013 4:39 PM

    to watch the light of your light pass
    that would probably pull my moon out of gravity...

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    1. Maggie Grace9/30/2013 5:43 PM

      I know. I keep telling my husband he has to die after me. Really.

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  3. brudberg9/30/2013 4:45 PM

    Wonderful to use that old song and turning it joyous beat to something so sad... very good.

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    1. Maggie Grace9/30/2013 5:45 PM

      Thanks, Bjorn...god of dark writing. Am glad it's not true. Have no idea why that's what came up though.

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  4. WabiSabi9/30/2013 5:30 PM

    Watching one's beloved in the last moments of life is, indeed, earth shattering. Your poem is filled with a deep sadness.

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  5. Anonymous9/30/2013 7:06 PM

    Emotional writing... well-crafted haiku.

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  6. Magical Mystical Teacher9/30/2013 7:14 PM

    I'm all for borrowing bits and pieces of other works for haiku, as you know! Well done!

    Eclipse Their Beauty

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  7. Anonymous9/30/2013 11:17 PM

    Sad and lovely at the same time.

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  8. Anonymous10/01/2013 7:38 AM

    A total eclipse indeed :)

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  9. Sumana Roy10/01/2013 10:57 AM

    i like that sad touch......nicely done..

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  10. joanne10/01/2013 12:37 PM

    oh, Lord, I feel this one...

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  11. Anonymous10/01/2013 12:38 PM

    powerful and speaks so creatively of losing a loved one ~ well penned ~ carol ^_^

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